I really liked this one! Excellent premise and execution!
SPOILERS BELOW
The character dialogue is great, the characters make sense and the story flow has a good pace.
The puzzle is implemented nicely with the story, adding to the urgency.
The only issue (that may not actually be an issue) would be the exposition near the end, where Everest explains the whole backstory, and then the main villain also explains his plans and then everything gets resolved.
This part felt a bit cartoony to me, but if that was the intended vibe of the game then I just took the beginning too seriously.
If I could define the experience I had with this VN it would be 3 words: I loved it.
The way you describe the story and the interaction with each character is very entertaining!
I would say that it is one of the few VNs that makes me feel that way, it's like I was watching an animated television series when I was a child.
I also liked the scenarios and GUI's, it seems that there has been an improvement in quality than your other VN which is worth admiring.
The only thing that could be negative would be certain transitions in the dialogues, since there are certain pauses in each part of the dialogue that makes it a little difficult to read for me (since I had to increase the speed of the text to be able to read the dialogues complete)
That would be my entire rating on this VN, it turned out excellent!
P.S. The video of the intro when you start the game made me laugh a little. I think it was because it caught me off guard 😂
There are a number of things I didn't get a chance to implement yet, like scenes displayed on the screen, a couple of backgrounds, and a couple extra sprite expressions beyond the default ones, so hopefully I can inprove it a bit.
I experimented with altering the text speed for the first time, so I was curious if it was for the better or worse, so I will keep that in mind for when I release a new build, hopefully in January. I wanted to try and release the full story, even if I didn't get to fully polish it.
Thanks for taking time to leave a review. I appreciate the feedback!
Oh, side note on the intro... it's kind of an inside joke on the fvn server. Unagi had a fursona pic drawn of me as an art trade for some artwork I did for him. He told the artist to draw me as Sonic the Hedgehog, because I tend to get things done quickly. They drew the intro pause for Sonic 1, so I spoofed the Sega logo intro 😁
(artwork by January Bridges)
I hope I sang the harmony close enough to the original! 😆
Some parts felt a bit too long. Also, I'm pretty sure the wrong sprites were used a few times (for example, they wake up from bed in their space suit for some reason) But the story is interesting to read through, I had a good time!
I saved all my coding for the last 30 hours, and caught the wrong outfit in the scene before just before submitting in the locker room, but forgot to update that one! I'll make sure to fix it in January. Thanks for reporting it!
I also agree that I deviated a bit too much from the core of my story, so the pacing is a bit lopsided at times. I'll be the first to admit that writing is not my strongsuit, but hopefully it will improve with experience.
I'm glad you enjoyed the concept at least; the original idea was a polar bear who mysteriously finds himself lost in the Antarctic with only an angry penguin to lead him home, but I thought that idea was too obvious.
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I really liked this one!
Excellent premise and execution!
SPOILERS BELOW
The character dialogue is great, the characters make sense and the story flow has a good pace.
The puzzle is implemented nicely with the story, adding to the urgency.
The only issue (that may not actually be an issue) would be the exposition near the end, where Everest explains the whole backstory, and then the main villain also explains his plans and then everything gets resolved.
This part felt a bit cartoony to me, but if that was the intended vibe of the game then I just took the beginning too seriously.
Overall, it was pretty great!
the story was pretty dramatic
If I could define the experience I had with this VN it would be 3 words: I loved it.
The way you describe the story and the interaction with each character is very entertaining!
I would say that it is one of the few VNs that makes me feel that way, it's like I was watching an animated television series when I was a child.
I also liked the scenarios and GUI's, it seems that there has been an improvement in quality than your other VN which is worth admiring.
The only thing that could be negative would be certain transitions in the dialogues, since there are certain pauses in each part of the dialogue that makes it a little difficult to read for me (since I had to increase the speed of the text to be able to read the dialogues complete)
That would be my entire rating on this VN, it turned out excellent!
P.S. The video of the intro when you start the game made me laugh a little. I think it was because it caught me off guard 😂
Thanks!
There are a number of things I didn't get a chance to implement yet, like scenes displayed on the screen, a couple of backgrounds, and a couple extra sprite expressions beyond the default ones, so hopefully I can inprove it a bit.
I experimented with altering the text speed for the first time, so I was curious if it was for the better or worse, so I will keep that in mind for when I release a new build, hopefully in January. I wanted to try and release the full story, even if I didn't get to fully polish it.
Thanks for taking time to leave a review. I appreciate the feedback!
Oh, side note on the intro... it's kind of an inside joke on the fvn server. Unagi had a fursona pic drawn of me as an art trade for some artwork I did for him. He told the artist to draw me as Sonic the Hedgehog, because I tend to get things done quickly. They drew the intro pause for Sonic 1, so I spoofed the Sega logo intro 😁
(artwork by January Bridges)
I hope I sang the harmony close enough to the original! 😆
Oh I understand!
I had seen that video before but I was surprised that you used it in your VN.
But hey, it was a good start for a game ;)
Some parts felt a bit too long. Also, I'm pretty sure the wrong sprites were used a few times (for example, they wake up from bed in their space suit for some reason)
But the story is interesting to read through, I had a good time!
You're absolutely right : D
I saved all my coding for the last 30 hours, and caught the wrong outfit in the scene before just before submitting in the locker room, but forgot to update that one! I'll make sure to fix it in January. Thanks for reporting it!
I also agree that I deviated a bit too much from the core of my story, so the pacing is a bit lopsided at times. I'll be the first to admit that writing is not my strongsuit, but hopefully it will improve with experience.
I'm glad you enjoyed the concept at least; the original idea was a polar bear who mysteriously finds himself lost in the Antarctic with only an angry penguin to lead him home, but I thought that idea was too obvious.
Thanks for the read!